My poem is from the perspective of a mother who's child endures physical struggles as a result of his seizures. And throughout the poem she speaks in many metaphors that describe her child as much more than a medical condition. In the end, the theme of a mother's love shines through.
To revise my poem, I decided to get rid of the change in tone halfway and stick to the original, calming theme. I also made edits to the text display and added another few lines so that it would end in an appropriate spot. I think this video captures the true meaning of the poem more accurately…