- Intro paragraph is good just needs to have little bit more about twitter and relate the topic to twitter instead of just describing the topic only
- Methods paragraph is really good
-Analysis needs to talk about the numbers of the graphs a little more
- The firewall in China makes many of the questions very difficult to answer due to the fact that twitter is blocked
- I'd change the conclusion paragraph from bullet points and relate twitter to the topic and community the best you can
- The topic does respond well to a topic of social interest and is very specific, but can talk about twitter conversations more to strengthen the paper as a whole
- I would extend the paragraph explaining the whole firewall deal in china that block website like twitter to really show the reader what not being able to go on twitter and see whats going on in the world is doing to them
- The codes and the spreadsheets are very well organized and well written
-The format works well for a research paper like this the only section I would add a lot to is the conclusion.
1. Quickly describe what twitter is and why twitter is a place where people can talk about this topic.
2. Try and connect your topic to twitter and the use of #s. What aspects of the protest are people mentioning on twitter.
3. I like how you integrated your graphs into your discussion and explained them in depth. Better explain what is going on in the third graph and the actions of what the tweets were doing.
4. Add a title page. Make sure to delete the summaries in the works cited. Add page numbers to top right of paper.
I think that your report analyzes and offers insight to the Twitter community in regards to what you are doing your topic on. The only thing that I would say to make the connection slightly stronger would be to talk more about the connection between your topic and Twitter, and how it caused a big outbreak with the public.
Overall, your topic connects the Twitter conversation to your social topic, however, by explaining more about the relation between your topic and twitter, possibly through cited quotes, would definitely help to strengthen that.
I think that you visuals look good, but you can decrease the number of categories in the graph of ‘What #HongKongProtests Tweets are doing.’ This would allow it to be much more clearer for the reader when only the most important categories are put in place.
You have a good format going here. It is pretty clear for the reader. Regarding your bibliography, do not forget to take out the explanations posted underneath each one, because you do not need them their for the final report. Lastly, make sure to add a strong conclusion to sum up the entire paper/report.
Comments
Hong Kong Protest Revision
- Intro paragraph is good just needs to have little bit more about twitter and relate the topic to twitter instead of just describing the topic only
- Methods paragraph is really good
-Analysis needs to talk about the numbers of the graphs a little more
- The firewall in China makes many of the questions very difficult to answer due to the fact that twitter is blocked
- I'd change the conclusion paragraph from bullet points and relate twitter to the topic and community the best you can
- The topic does respond well to a topic of social interest and is very specific, but can talk about twitter conversations more to strengthen the paper as a whole
- I would extend the paragraph explaining the whole firewall deal in china that block website like twitter to really show the reader what not being able to go on twitter and see whats going on in the world is doing to them
- The codes and the spreadsheets are very well organized and well written
-The format works well for a research paper like this the only section I would add a lot to is the conclusion.
Peer Review
1. Quickly describe what twitter is and why twitter is a place where people can talk about this topic.
2. Try and connect your topic to twitter and the use of #s. What aspects of the protest are people mentioning on twitter.
3. I like how you integrated your graphs into your discussion and explained them in depth. Better explain what is going on in the third graph and the actions of what the tweets were doing.
4. Add a title page. Make sure to delete the summaries in the works cited. Add page numbers to top right of paper.
Peer Revisions
I think that your report analyzes and offers insight to the Twitter community in regards to what you are doing your topic on. The only thing that I would say to make the connection slightly stronger would be to talk more about the connection between your topic and Twitter, and how it caused a big outbreak with the public.
Overall, your topic connects the Twitter conversation to your social topic, however, by explaining more about the relation between your topic and twitter, possibly through cited quotes, would definitely help to strengthen that.
I think that you visuals look good, but you can decrease the number of categories in the graph of ‘What #HongKongProtests Tweets are doing.’ This would allow it to be much more clearer for the reader when only the most important categories are put in place.
You have a good format going here. It is pretty clear for the reader. Regarding your bibliography, do not forget to take out the explanations posted underneath each one, because you do not need them their for the final report. Lastly, make sure to add a strong conclusion to sum up the entire paper/report.
Overall, your paper is good.
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