Introduction:
- I would add slightly more information about the topic of the Trump camps while also adding a statement about what the essay is going to do (similar to a thesis statement). 
- Maybe state that Twitter is a social media platform 
- Vary sentence structure (many sentences start with the word "This")
Methods:
- 2nd sentence is a fragment 
- Look over this section for small grammar mistakes
Conclusion:
- I would add in another section after Methods and before the Conclusion to discuss the data analysis and leave the conclusion for relating the data to a broader topic (Why is the analysis important?)
- I suggest embedding the graphs into the essay as well 

Introduction

• I would tweak the first sentence to make it a little more concise.
• I would talk more about the context of the Trump camps.

Methods

• All I would do is discuss how you categorized each tweet. Did you run into any difficulties?
• The last sentence is incomplete and probably a typo. 
• Sentence two is a fragment. 
• Revise the beginning to make it more concise. 

Conclusion

• Paper as a whole seems to be missing a data analysis section. 
• Good analysis in here. Conclusion should tie it all together more. 

References

• Shouldn't be annotated. 
• Should be called a bibliography since you didn't cite all of those sources in the paper. 

Good job overall!

Two non-surface suggestions in the responses was to give more context to #TrumpCamps and that I should include a data analysis part. The context in the introduction was very bland looking over it and that it left the reader confused as to what I was actually analyzing. The data analysis part should be included as I mostly fit the data analysis with the conclusion. This made the conclusion mediocre at best  and confusing all together. I plan to fix these problems by going more into what exactly are detention centers and how the internet responded. The data analysis part can be fixed by putting that before the conclusion and talk about what the data actually showed. I can make the bar charts into pie graphs instead as most of the data will fit better with that format. 

Checklist:

Include more information on #TrumpCamps for introduction

Include a data analysis part before the conclusion

Change the bar charts into pie graphs

List the categories and the reason for them while using examples