One criticism would be to add more quotations to your essay. You included many scholarly points from the journal articles but not many quotes to back it up. Also make sure to cite where you find all your information from using in text citations.
you did a good job providing a thorough overview of the poem with many details that were explained and researched well. When we read the poem in class we had similar reactions and interpretations as the scholarly articles that were included in this paper. Just make sure you are adding citations where they are needed.
The organization of your paragraphs is the main concern with this essay. The second really long paragraph could be split up into a few different sections or combined with the last two smaller paragraphs.
The header in MLA format is your last name and then the page number. Also, make sure your Bibliography resources are in alphabetical order. You don't need a title page for MLA format just a header that looks like: (you can find this on the MLA format website)
Make sure you’re citing all of your work! There is a good use of evidence backing up your essay from reliable sources but I would suggest using a few more quotations.
You provided a thorough analysis of the poem, and it is evident you did your research. Again, I would suggest adding more quotations and make sure you cite them.
The second paragraph should be broken up to at least two or three paragraphs. You have a lot of ideas going on in there that can easily be split up.
Make sure it’s in MLA format and the bibliography is in alphabetical order.
In the first paragraph, you start two sentences with "Gwendolyn does a great job with..." and "Brooks does a terrific job by...". I would change the structure so it sounds less repetitive
I would suggest adding more info from scholarly articles about what past interpretations/analyses have said about the poem
Instead of describing the imagery as "excellent", I would suggest choosing a more descriptive word. If the imagery shows the reader memories of their youth, a descriptive word could be "nostalgic"
I think providing context for the time period of the time works well
I would suggest only referring to the author of the poem by her last name "Brooks" throughout your essay
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One criticism would be to add more quotations to your essay. You included many scholarly points from the journal articles but not many quotes to back it up. Also make sure to cite where you find all your information from using in text citations.
you did a good job providing a thorough overview of the poem with many details that were explained and researched well. When we read the poem in class we had similar reactions and interpretations as the scholarly articles that were included in this paper. Just make sure you are adding citations where they are needed.
The organization of your paragraphs is the main concern with this essay. The second really long paragraph could be split up into a few different sections or combined with the last two smaller paragraphs.
The header in MLA format is your last name and then the page number. Also, make sure your Bibliography resources are in alphabetical order. You don't need a title page for MLA format just a header that looks like: (you can find this on the MLA format website)
Neal E. Bibdarsh
Professor Haujeemoto
English 201
2 Nov 2017
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