- Add separate title page and start the Introduction on a new page
- When you quote people in the essay, maybe indicate who they are (researcher? scientist? etc) so the reader knows who you're referencing.
- When adding quotes, make sure to use commas
"According to Plastic Oceans, "We produce over..."
- For the methods section, I would break it into two paragraphs (one for how you used TAGS and the spreadsheet and one for how you coded the tweets)
- Maybe embed the graphs into the text
- In the data analysis section, if you reference data from a specific graph, state which one you're taking the data from
- Proofread for small spelling errors/grammar mistakes
- The last sentence in the Data Analysis section is incomplete (no punctuation)
"It is not surprising to me that"
- For the conclusion, I suggest trying to relate the data to a broader picture (like why the data is important to acknowledge) instead of only discussing the importance of saving marine life.
- Include the citations on a separate page
One thing that I gathered from my reviews was that people would like to see more standpoints from a legal and social stand point. The people that reviews my paper also said to tie the Twitter aspect into my paper more.
I plan to research about social and legal issues about eliminating plastic to see if that effects why we haven't already eliminated plastic. I also plan to use users tweets to give the reader an idea of how it effects the community and how people on social media feel about the topic.
When I revise my essay I will go more into depth about the categories and how I actually placed each tweet into what category. I also will add another category based on location to show that this problem is worldwide not just within the US.
Comments
revision comments
- Add separate title page and start the Introduction on a new page
- When you quote people in the essay, maybe indicate who they are (researcher? scientist? etc) so the reader knows who you're referencing.
- When adding quotes, make sure to use commas
"According to Plastic Oceans, "We produce over..."
- For the methods section, I would break it into two paragraphs (one for how you used TAGS and the spreadsheet and one for how you coded the tweets)
- Maybe embed the graphs into the text
- In the data analysis section, if you reference data from a specific graph, state which one you're taking the data from
- Proofread for small spelling errors/grammar mistakes
- The last sentence in the Data Analysis section is incomplete (no punctuation)
"It is not surprising to me that"
- For the conclusion, I suggest trying to relate the data to a broader picture (like why the data is important to acknowledge) instead of only discussing the importance of saving marine life.
- Include the citations on a separate page
Really nice analysis of the data!
Peer Review Comments
Introduction
Method
Data Analysis
Conclusion
Great overall.
One thing that I gathered…
One thing that I gathered from my reviews was that people would like to see more standpoints from a legal and social stand point. The people that reviews my paper also said to tie the Twitter aspect into my paper more.
I plan to research about social and legal issues about eliminating plastic to see if that effects why we haven't already eliminated plastic. I also plan to use users tweets to give the reader an idea of how it effects the community and how people on social media feel about the topic.
When I revise my essay I will go more into depth about the categories and how I actually placed each tweet into what category. I also will add another category based on location to show that this problem is worldwide not just within the US.
Checklist
Peer edit
Some things I picked up on in your paper was that your conclusion was brief, and there were some grammar issues.
I really liked the topic and I would have liked to of heard more about what you found out while researching.