intro may be to broad. I would use the word twitter in the intro since that is a main part of the essay.
data and data analysis was well put together
research- when talking about rt part try to provide evidence
women soccer team not receiving equal pay add evidence by tweets
overall your paper is very good. I would just say that you need to provide more evidence towards your claim by using the graphs and tweets of what you coded.
1. The report offers an interesting view on the equal pay topic but loses focus over the course of the paper. The focus on the community can be revised by going over the graphs as the data analysis mostly included things other than the data. The most important part is to keep the report to the point of the community and not include things that add nothing to the report itself.
2. The report does a wonderful job in staying in a single social problem about women pay for the entire report. The topic is focused and isn't a broad topic that will have very obtuse responses. I think that the topic is already focused as it is as it brings interesting data to the report.
3. The graphs are very nice but they are too many of them and are not mentioned in the report for the majority of them. I think that it is important to pick 2-3 graphs that you are very interested in and bring the report to center around that instead. The visuals are extremely small due to the number of them fit into one page, this leads to them being hard to read and analyze by the reader.
4. The format is very solid as I really like the part where you discuss the categories and their uses. A improvement would be to focus the data analysis part on only the data and not other factors. The conclusion itself is very bland and does not reveal anything of importance to the reader. I did however like the focus on the location of the user and the focus on the EU.
5. The final suggestion are to focus on 2-3 graphs and build around that for the data analysis. Don't bring up other things in the data analysis and talk about what the data itself reveals. The conclusion can be redone to include interesting things found in the graphs.
1. I believe that this analysis does a good job reflecting to the community. I gives both genders side, which I believe to be important to this topic because most people would see it to only be important to females, but you tie in males and their opinions on the topic.
2. The report does a very good job with staying focused on the topic. Good job with citations from journals or articles, but maybe use a couple tweets.
3. The graphs that were chosen seem to be goof for you topic. Try to narrow it down to the important topics, and state why those ones are important and why you chose them.
4. I think that you did a very good job with organization and formatting. I like how you stated what each section was, and how you followed the topic within your paragraphs.
5. This was a very strong analysis, just make sure that when your editing to go through and change any spelling/grammar errors. Try to use some of the tweets you found so you tie in Twitter with your topic.
-I need to give my conclusion more depth and discuss results from the graphs. I also need to stay on topic and talk about the twitter community throughout the paper.
- I plan on going through the data and doing a better job of analyzing everything while also discussing how this can effect the community. Another major fix I have to make is making sure I'm on topic which can be done by applying tweets to just about every section and explaining why they go with the sections.
- I need to focus in on certain graphs and get rid of the excess ones. I might change a few to pie graphs to get certain percentages so it is easier to see in the analysis.
- Add my works cited page
-Make sure my header and title page are formatted correctly
Comments
intro may be to broad. I…
intro may be to broad. I would use the word twitter in the intro since that is a main part of the essay.
data and data analysis was well put together
research- when talking about rt part try to provide evidence
women soccer team not receiving equal pay add evidence by tweets
overall your paper is very good. I would just say that you need to provide more evidence towards your claim by using the graphs and tweets of what you coded.
Peer Review
1. The report offers an interesting view on the equal pay topic but loses focus over the course of the paper. The focus on the community can be revised by going over the graphs as the data analysis mostly included things other than the data. The most important part is to keep the report to the point of the community and not include things that add nothing to the report itself.
2. The report does a wonderful job in staying in a single social problem about women pay for the entire report. The topic is focused and isn't a broad topic that will have very obtuse responses. I think that the topic is already focused as it is as it brings interesting data to the report.
3. The graphs are very nice but they are too many of them and are not mentioned in the report for the majority of them. I think that it is important to pick 2-3 graphs that you are very interested in and bring the report to center around that instead. The visuals are extremely small due to the number of them fit into one page, this leads to them being hard to read and analyze by the reader.
4. The format is very solid as I really like the part where you discuss the categories and their uses. A improvement would be to focus the data analysis part on only the data and not other factors. The conclusion itself is very bland and does not reveal anything of importance to the reader. I did however like the focus on the location of the user and the focus on the EU.
5. The final suggestion are to focus on 2-3 graphs and build around that for the data analysis. Don't bring up other things in the data analysis and talk about what the data itself reveals. The conclusion can be redone to include interesting things found in the graphs.
1. I believe that this…
1. I believe that this analysis does a good job reflecting to the community. I gives both genders side, which I believe to be important to this topic because most people would see it to only be important to females, but you tie in males and their opinions on the topic.
2. The report does a very good job with staying focused on the topic. Good job with citations from journals or articles, but maybe use a couple tweets.
3. The graphs that were chosen seem to be goof for you topic. Try to narrow it down to the important topics, and state why those ones are important and why you chose them.
4. I think that you did a very good job with organization and formatting. I like how you stated what each section was, and how you followed the topic within your paragraphs.
5. This was a very strong analysis, just make sure that when your editing to go through and change any spelling/grammar errors. Try to use some of the tweets you found so you tie in Twitter with your topic.
Good Job!!
Peer Review Response
-I need to give my conclusion more depth and discuss results from the graphs. I also need to stay on topic and talk about the twitter community throughout the paper.
- I plan on going through the data and doing a better job of analyzing everything while also discussing how this can effect the community. Another major fix I have to make is making sure I'm on topic which can be done by applying tweets to just about every section and explaining why they go with the sections.
- I need to focus in on certain graphs and get rid of the excess ones. I might change a few to pie graphs to get certain percentages so it is easier to see in the analysis.
- Add my works cited page
-Make sure my header and title page are formatted correctly
- Fix spelling/grammar issues
-Focus on 2-3 graphs