Audio Essay Draft

I like the focus of your audio essay. The evidence provided and outside audio both support your points. I suggesting bumping the overall audio up to make it easier to hear through conventional laptop speakers.

I really liked your sound effects that you added. I thought this audio essay was well thought out and interesting to listen to. Also, I thought your transitions were really good. Overall, I think this is a really good first draft. 

The tone of the narration is comfortable and working well. You might want to use some music to open the piece and add background sounds or transitions. You can work on some noise reduction in some of the audio clips. The meme external audio is nice but might be transitioned out of more smoothly. I wonder if you want to do one more edit of the script to check that the movement of ideas is connected just right and do any additional tightening. Nice work.