I think this piece is very well written and goes very in depth on the results found in the graphs and charts. An area that could improve is applying these results better into justifying the point trying to be made. Instead of just saying that you learned about the different arguments you should apply it to what different types of people have to say and why they say it. Also, the graphs you created were very well put together but instead of placing them all together and separated from the text you could try and place them in places in the paper that you are talking about them. Your overall formatting of the paper was also well done and you had everything that was needed.
The report did a really good job combining the Twitter data with the scholarly research. There isn’t anything in particular that strikes me as something to strengthen insight into the community.
I think the topic of deportation was covered thoroughly through the Twitter analysis and literature. It may be helpful to use an example of an individual tweet to further support how it fits into the literature and conversation.
My only critique of the format is that it is a little confusing to follow along in the absence of headings, such as introduction, methods, results, etc. It is useful to have those readings so that readers can jump back and forth between parts of the report if needed.
As mentioned in class, in order to come across objectively as a writer, it is important to not insert our own opinions into the paper. The paragraph on the anti-deportation stance is well thought out and provides context for the study, but there are several instances where an opinion seems to be expressed as your own, rather than that of the Twitter community. For instance, one of the first sentences says that “the kids and family should not be trapped in cages..” which is totally valid, but does not come across as objective.
- I like the thought process of choosing a hashtag being displayed. The methods part it well-written.
-The categories and visualizations seem to make a strong connection between the topic and tweets. A good revision may be to spread out the graphs a little.
-It might be a good idea to split the report into parts, so people know what to expect and it is well organized.
-The report looks very good and so does the conclusion.
1. I plan to split my paper into parts so that it can become more organized, and easier for the reader to comprehend.
2. I will talk less from an opinion based viewpoint throughout certain parts of my paper. This will help the paper to represent more of a report.
By avoiding to express my opinion too much, especially during the end of the paper can allow for the reader to have a clearer understanding of my report, and what I analyzed.
Regarding my visuals, I will put my graphs within my paper so that when I am talking about one of them, the graph will be right next to it, rather than all the way above on another page.
Within the report, visually labeling my paragraphs will help to improve the organization of my paper.
Comments
Twitter review
I think this piece is very well written and goes very in depth on the results found in the graphs and charts. An area that could improve is applying these results better into justifying the point trying to be made. Instead of just saying that you learned about the different arguments you should apply it to what different types of people have to say and why they say it. Also, the graphs you created were very well put together but instead of placing them all together and separated from the text you could try and place them in places in the paper that you are talking about them. Your overall formatting of the paper was also well done and you had everything that was needed.
Peer review
Peer Review
- I like the thought process of choosing a hashtag being displayed. The methods part it well-written.
-The categories and visualizations seem to make a strong connection between the topic and tweets. A good revision may be to spread out the graphs a little.
-It might be a good idea to split the report into parts, so people know what to expect and it is well organized.
-The report looks very good and so does the conclusion.
Revisions
Non-Surface Suggestions
1. I plan to split my paper into parts so that it can become more organized, and easier for the reader to comprehend.
2. I will talk less from an opinion based viewpoint throughout certain parts of my paper. This will help the paper to represent more of a report.