1. I like how you mentioned that the Twitter community has grown over the years. Talk about what makes twitter so unique and a comfortable place for people to express their beliefs?
2. Good transition to introducing your topic while relating it to Twitter. Good focused topic on a recent event that has sparked controversy and gives you a lot to evaluate.
3. Integrate your graphs into your discussion while you are mentioning/talking about that specific graph. Why was the left in favor of the walkout and why was the right not in favor? (Talk more about that graph). Maybe add one more graph since the stance and political affiliation graphs are showing about the same thing.
4. Add a conclusion at the end to summarize what you talked about in your paper and maybe add one more last thought it you have one. Also make sure to add bibliography. Add header on top of each page (title and page number)
5. Maybe mention at the end of the intro what the sides are in relation to the walkout. Why do you think the majority of people are pathos? What about Wayfair that makes people so emotionally invested? Maybe try and make connections on trends you noticed like were those who were neutral more reporting on the issue?
I think that your report analyzes and offers insight to the Twitter community in regards to what you are researching. If you would like you could expand your paragraph about the history of the Wayfair Walkout. Otherwise, it is has a pretty strong focus on the community.
Your report does connect the Twitter conversation to your social interest topic, however, to make it stronger, I would put in a few quotes about people’s responses to this outbreak. That way the reader can get a better grasp on what is really going on.
I think that your visuals/graphs look great, and contain the right amount of categories. You also do a good job of explaining the results.
You have a great format going here. It is all very clear and understanding for the reader. However, do not forget to include your bibliography in APA format at the end of your paper.
Lastly, there are a bunch of unnecessary blank pages throughout the paper, so also don’t forget to delete those.
This piece does a great job describing the exact twitter community that was analyzed and couldn’t be much more refined. The # was also strongly connected to a topic of social interest. The only thing that could be improved on would be connecting the result of the analysis to a more general idea that is of interest to the readers. The visuals created were effective and clean but could have been placed near the areas where they were individually being discussed. Also, for some reason there are blank pages separating some of the papers which made it a little more difficult to read.
1. I changed up the pathos, logos and ethos part by making each of them a different paragraph and threw in some examples to show why each was what is was.
2. Graphs will be split up and integrated within the results section for sure.
3. Bibliography will be added in, just forgot it in the rough draft.
The biggest change to the paper that I will be making is adding an extra chart showing the reasoning behind who supports or is against the walkout, this will add more information to the results column and help the reader make sense of why people have the opinions of what they had.
Not to sure why the blank pages were in there, that will be fixed for the final copy.
Comments
Peer Review
1. I like how you mentioned that the Twitter community has grown over the years. Talk about what makes twitter so unique and a comfortable place for people to express their beliefs?
2. Good transition to introducing your topic while relating it to Twitter. Good focused topic on a recent event that has sparked controversy and gives you a lot to evaluate.
3. Integrate your graphs into your discussion while you are mentioning/talking about that specific graph. Why was the left in favor of the walkout and why was the right not in favor? (Talk more about that graph). Maybe add one more graph since the stance and political affiliation graphs are showing about the same thing.
4. Add a conclusion at the end to summarize what you talked about in your paper and maybe add one more last thought it you have one. Also make sure to add bibliography. Add header on top of each page (title and page number)
5. Maybe mention at the end of the intro what the sides are in relation to the walkout. Why do you think the majority of people are pathos? What about Wayfair that makes people so emotionally invested? Maybe try and make connections on trends you noticed like were those who were neutral more reporting on the issue?
Overall good paper!
Peer Revisions
I think that your report analyzes and offers insight to the Twitter community in regards to what you are researching. If you would like you could expand your paragraph about the history of the Wayfair Walkout. Otherwise, it is has a pretty strong focus on the community.
Your report does connect the Twitter conversation to your social interest topic, however, to make it stronger, I would put in a few quotes about people’s responses to this outbreak. That way the reader can get a better grasp on what is really going on.
I think that your visuals/graphs look great, and contain the right amount of categories. You also do a good job of explaining the results.
You have a great format going here. It is all very clear and understanding for the reader. However, do not forget to include your bibliography in APA format at the end of your paper.
Lastly, there are a bunch of unnecessary blank pages throughout the paper, so also don’t forget to delete those.
This piece does a great job…
This piece does a great job describing the exact twitter community that was analyzed and couldn’t be much more refined. The # was also strongly connected to a topic of social interest. The only thing that could be improved on would be connecting the result of the analysis to a more general idea that is of interest to the readers. The visuals created were effective and clean but could have been placed near the areas where they were individually being discussed. Also, for some reason there are blank pages separating some of the papers which made it a little more difficult to read.
Reply to revisions
1. I changed up the pathos, logos and ethos part by making each of them a different paragraph and threw in some examples to show why each was what is was.
2. Graphs will be split up and integrated within the results section for sure.
3. Bibliography will be added in, just forgot it in the rough draft.
The biggest change to the paper that I will be making is adding an extra chart showing the reasoning behind who supports or is against the walkout, this will add more information to the results column and help the reader make sense of why people have the opinions of what they had.
Not to sure why the blank pages were in there, that will be fixed for the final copy.
Thank you!