Do not go gentle into that good night,
Old age should burn and rave at close of day;
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
Though wise men at their end know dark is right,
Because their words had forked no lightning they
Do not go gentle into that good night.
Good men, the last wave by, crying how bright
Their frail deeds might have danced in a green bay,
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
Wild men who caught and sang the sun in flight,
And learn, too late, they grieved it on its way,
Do not go gentle into that good night.
Grave men, near death, who see with blinding sight
Blind eyes could blaze like meteors and be gay,
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
And you, my father, there on the sad height,
Curse, bless, me now with your fierce tears, I pray.
Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
Comments
Peer Review
I thought the footage of the rough waters and immensity of the ocean went really well with the theme of this poem. However some of the footage I did not think flowed quite as well, such as the girls going on the boat or the cityscape ("Their frail deeds might have danced in a green bay"). Those two seemed a little bit more literal while all the others seemed very illustrative. All in all-good work.
Peer Review
I remember this poem from Interstellar, and it was nice hearing the OST from the movie. However, I think it would work better for the narration if the background music is quieter. I really enjoyed the typography, especially the parts of "rage" and "dying light". Liked how you used the same font for most parts, and switched it up for those specific parts. It really did pop up and gave the sense emphasis. This was cool to watch.
The way the piece…
The way the piece transitions into the opening is working well. The audio track with the reading is also a nice element. The use of dynamic text around 20secs is also strong. The switch to active imagery is also working well. In spots, I'm thinking around 35 seconds, the mix of imagery, music, and vocal begins to feel a bit overwhelming. It might be that lowering the level of the audio tracks, maybe reducing the music to be more background will make things easier to process. On a related note, the pacing of the piece in general feels a bit quick. It will be hard to change much keyed with the vocal track, but there might be ways of experimenting with pauses or pacing, etc. I like the clip around 48 seconds with the digital clock. I'm less sure about the next one with people stepping on the boat. The time and clock motif might be something play with more. For the visual after 1:02 it might be worth experimenting with some other elements to create a kind of point/counterpoint that mixes with the athletic imagery. This is very engaging and powerful, so experimenting more and refining the imagery and then making some technical things smoother will make it even stronger. Nice work.
peer review
I had to rewatch the rage line a couple times, in the beginning, a couple times. At first, I was thinking that the words moving the way they did distract from the images I was looking at, but after watching it a couple more times, it had more of an emphasizing effect and it also complimented the video that was playing when they popped up. Some of the effects used on the videos made the poem feel very dramatic which I loved.