Old Manuscript

You did a really good job with the music selection. It felt like the perfect calm, soothing instrumental you would want playing for a scenic video as such, and this helped the video flow nicely all the way through. In addition, I liked your decision to alternate between video clips and images. When you revise the video, try to think a little bit more about when it would make sense to use an image vs. a video (with relation to the words in the poem).

I agree with the comment above about the benefit of the music selection and the suggestion of thinking about when the words match with the video. I would also suggest for the final product that you match all of the images and videos to the same aspect ratio as the others, meaning, that they all fit the screen size edge to edge or close to edge to edge instead of having the black border. Also, some of the first few slides could have the text transition a little bit sooner, just to keep viewers more engaged.

The mix of imagery and music is working well. I like the use of the canvas at 22secs to display both image and text. If feel, though, like the image of the reaching hand loses force after a few seconds. You can rethink that section to perhaps include more imagery in the middle segment of the canvas and/or do more with the text dynamically in the black segments on the edges. You may be able to split chunks of text up in several segments--e.g., around 48 secs, the pencil image could show one must be on top, and then a linguist below the pencil, playing with the timing for emphasis. For longer chunks of text--e.g., around 1:10, this will help viewers with processing the words with the pacing f the piece. The mix of still and video imagery is an interesting challenge. In spots like 1:17, I find it quite effective as the stillness is replaced by motion. In some of the earlier segments, I think more work is needed with placement on the canvas, timing, mix with text, etc. The imagery, mood, sounds are all working well, so getting the approach right with the still images and the chunking, pacing, and placement of the text will really bring out the poem well. Nice work.