Roughest Draft of the final project. 1/2 of the actual poem/video
Comments
Peer Review
I think the images that you used for this video are really beautiful. I also liked the narrators voice, it was very soothing to go with all the soothing images you showed. There was one transition you may want to fix (from the beach to the people laying in bed around second 24), it was just not quite smooth. It was really calming to watch and all the footage you chose was so clear. Awesome job!
The mix of the low…
The mix of the low background music with the vocal of the poem is working well. It might be that letting the music go a bit longer before bringing the poem in can smooth the intro a bit. Starting at around 21 secs, I get a feeling like the pacing may be a bit quick. This might be tough to address, since the vocals are moving the piece along, but there may be ways of weaving in a pause, letting the music take over for a bit, or otherwise thinking about the flow in these segments. You can also think about the placement of the clips on the canvas. In general, things are working well, but in spots it might be worth thinking about how the text is placed over the letterbox framing--.e.g., the clips that begin around 24secs where the white text over the image is a bit challenging. At around 55 secs, I'm assuming the abrupt ending is just waiting for more materials to be developed. The mix of imagery is working well, and the music and vocal track give this a lot of power, so continue to work on the mixing of these, thinking about pacing, and adding more materials should result in a very nice piece. Good work.
ou will want to double check the accuracy of the text--e.g., around 14 secs.
peer review
Hey Nathan,
I like that you made use both of a speaker and music. I didn't know if this would work well together since I figured that the music would drown out the voice, but the volume you chose for the music makes it work well to compliment the speaker. Your choice in images was also very pleasing to watch. The only critique I have is that in one of the videos, it was a stock video I guess so I could see the watermark and it was a little distracting but it wasn't that obvious. Other than that, I think you're on the right track.