Prayer During a Time My Son Is Having Seizures

The imagery and music were extremely powerful in this video, even more so than the poem's words. This video does a great job of exemplifying why video poems can be so useful while using powerful video in the background that really reinforces the emotions created by the poem's words. The music in particular really helped to make the video really emotionally captivating. By using footage that flowed extremely well with the mood and speed of the poem, the message was really well-given and the poem's purpose feels like it matches up with the video on screen.

 I liked the music and thought it fit the message of the poem well. Also, the repetition of  the train video really caught my attention and I thought it helped to understand the message of the poem. I liked that you used a variety of different types of videos and even black screens. The variety of videos allowed for me to interpret the poem for myself with some underlying direction from the rest of the video. I agree with Will that the speed is perfect for this poem, I was able to read all the words and think about the meaning of the poem. Overall, I thought this video poem was well done. 

The strategy of quickly shifting imagery beneath the text really pulls the viewer in at the beginning. In general, the editing is doing well to keep the flow going in the piece. I wonder if some juxtaposition with the imagery and text would be helpful in spots. For instance, the scene that references a green branch lopped off might be swapped out for a crying child or some other imagery that brings the human more directly into the piece and creates a kind of irony with the textual statement. I like the train imagery and repetition at around 35 secs. I'm not feeling like the imagery starting at 44 secs is working optimally. I see that it is building toward the statement to come later--but I want to have him--so maybe something a bit more negative and less literal--creases in the face of someone worried, an empty swingset. I'm not sure what will work best, but feel like experimenting makes sense. The use of just the text for I want to have him works well. The abstract imagery that closes out the piece is working well. You can also work on smoothing out transitions and polishing the piece. There is a good deal of clever editing to engage the reader, so thinking and experimenting more with how the imagery and text come together to deliver the poem will make things even stronger. Nice work.