digital literacy essay draft

Your essay was informative and well pieced together. The only thing I would recommend is to bump up your voice so that it is louder. 

Overall, I thought this was well-put together and did a great job of conveying your points. My only recommendation would be to try and level out your voice's volume, because it seems to be a good bit quieter than the added audio clips.

I agree with the comments already said. I also would try to speak a little enthusiastically. I also struggled with this so much, because it is not easy to sound like you aren't reading. Overall though, I really enjoyed this and the sound effects/music throughout. Good job!

I thought the information that you presented in this audio essay was very clear and informative. I would recommend finding additional outside audio clips and bumping up your voice volume. However, I would stick with the original text that you used as that was definitely the highlight of the essay. 

Your audio essay was really ell thought out but I thought you could use a little more inflection in your voice. Great job!

The narration comes through clearly with lots of good information. In some segments, it feels a bit like it is being read, so aiming for more of a conversational feel might be good—perhaps trimming the script a bit more. I'm not sure how I feel about the computer voice. I wonder if weaving some of those points into the narration and then using music to start the piece might be good. The clip with music creates a stark transition. I feel like something a bit more ambient that eases in an out might be good. The details are all good. And the narration in the second half becomes even more clear. There is a lot of information being delivered by the narrator, so the main thing would be to try to find some other clips that take up issues or literacy. Or perhaps you can interview someone and bring in other voices and information that way. The topic and details are all strong, so coming up with some way of bringing in more sonic variety will pull it all together. Nice work.