Sam Audio Essay Draft

I really liked that you outlined what the audio essay would talk about. Because the listener can't glance back over the words to get an idea, it's a great idea to reinforce what you're going to later talk about. Also, I thought you're added audio clip flowed seamlessly with your speech. Going forward, I feel like their is a lot of potential in fleshing out some of your arguments. Moreover, though your pacing was consistent and at a good pace throughout, at points, your voice lacked inflection. As a listener, I am more likely to pay attention to someone who seems passionate about his topic. Overall, great draft!

To me, the information was very well presented and outlined. The information was interesting and kept me wanting to listen. One thing that I would change is the tone and/or excitement in your voice. I also had a problem with this, where it seemed like I was just reading it off a paper. 

I also did my audio essay on memes, and I really enjoyed yours. I like the content and the use of outside audio. The research and the way you present it is also strong. My only advice is to record it in a quieter area maybe. Your voice sounds a bit hazy. Overall, good job!

I thought the topic of audio essay was interesting! I would suggest to try and get your audio clip to be clearer. I really liked the clip that you added because the guy had a very enthusiastic tone. Overall, I think this was a good first draft and with a couple of changed could become a really good audio essay. 

The narrative voice has a nice conversational feel. The pacing is a bit quick and some of the capturing may be a bit high in intensity with some popping and mouth noises. I feel like the audio sample can be trimmed down a bit. You can use some music or other sound effects to ease into the piece and create transitions. In the second half, the narration loses a bit of its conversational feel. If you can find another audio clip to weave in, it may let you cut back or add variety to some of the narration in the second half. As you record the narration again, you may want to do a bit more trimming on the script to keep things flowing and keep the tone conversational. 

I really liked how you were able to fund not too formal in your audio essay. I think it would add to your essay by including a few more sound effects, and maybe trying to increase the inflection in your voice at some points. Overall, very interesting and well done.