The narration is working well. The visuals are nicely timed to the points in the narration. You can build transitions into the different segments. I really like the tone of the narration. One challenge is the pacing in the first half feel too quick. I noticed a couple of spots where the microphone picked up too much air for P sounds, etc. Those can be cleaned up, but since the early parts feel too fast, you might consider capturing one more narrative track that addresses these, cleans up other parts and takes it to the next level. You can slow down clips in RUSH to help with the pacing. Starting at about 3:48, if feels like adding more visual variety will help with the close out. The points are strong, so linking them to visuals will make them stronger. All of this is strong and on theright track, so some transitions, small work with the visuals, and work on the audio track will really bring it all together. Nice work.
The narration is working…
The narration is working well. The visuals are nicely timed to the points in the narration. You can build transitions into the different segments. I really like the tone of the narration. One challenge is the pacing in the first half feel too quick. I noticed a couple of spots where the microphone picked up too much air for P sounds, etc. Those can be cleaned up, but since the early parts feel too fast, you might consider capturing one more narrative track that addresses these, cleans up other parts and takes it to the next level. You can slow down clips in RUSH to help with the pacing. Starting at about 3:48, if feels like adding more visual variety will help with the close out. The points are strong, so linking them to visuals will make them stronger. All of this is strong and on theright track, so some transitions, small work with the visuals, and work on the audio track will really bring it all together. Nice work.