The realistic look and feel starting on screen 2 add a nice sense of authenticity. I like where this is heading as well. I'm having some trouble feeling the full force of the argument. It may be that I'm not picking up on the age of the some of the Haley Stone profile aspects as strongly as I might to set things up. I wonder if adding a couple screens at the beginning where the child makes the account that would really foreground the concerns would make sense. I also wonder if brainstorming about how to make the opening and closing slides have the same aesthetic as the app as they deliver the information. The opening seems like the look can be easily adjusted--maybe while amping up the Stone childhood aspects. For the last two screens, more rethinking might be needed. Could the info be added as posts? Or maybe a chat could start up at the end with a back and forth. I like where this is going. Pushing on the app-like delivery, I think, will make it even stronger. Nice work.
The realistic look and feel…
The realistic look and feel starting on screen 2 add a nice sense of authenticity. I like where this is heading as well. I'm having some trouble feeling the full force of the argument. It may be that I'm not picking up on the age of the some of the Haley Stone profile aspects as strongly as I might to set things up. I wonder if adding a couple screens at the beginning where the child makes the account that would really foreground the concerns would make sense. I also wonder if brainstorming about how to make the opening and closing slides have the same aesthetic as the app as they deliver the information. The opening seems like the look can be easily adjusted--maybe while amping up the Stone childhood aspects. For the last two screens, more rethinking might be needed. Could the info be added as posts? Or maybe a chat could start up at the end with a back and forth. I like where this is going. Pushing on the app-like delivery, I think, will make it even stronger. Nice work.