I would like to get it revised again because my very first version was far from good. Each time I know it will get better so the more I can improve the more happy I will be with the end result
I need to figure out how to encorporate my background music and the audio I need. I thought I had figured it out but I can't seem to get it. Also, I would like to use a microphone to get a more clear voice.
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The narration sets up the…
The narration sets up the topic well. The background sounds in the audio can be cleaned up. There is also a sense of a reading from a script in the tone that can be reworked to be less formal. Once the other audio pieces are woven in, it will be easier to get a sense of the transitions and some of the other technical aspects. If you need anything for the composing of the other audio elements, we can go over the steps.
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Alex,
I thought you had a great script and your essay was filled with a lot of content. I really appreciated your thoroughness and attention to detail. I saw your note about technical difficulties, and I totally understand that issue. Besides that, one thing I could suggest would be to vary your pacing and tone. Sometimes your words could run together, especially with how dense your content is.
Regardless, I was glad you decided to incorporate the quotes from your outside sources yourself, rather than simply ignoring them. Best of luck with your audio issues.