Daniel:

• How well does the essay make use audio samples to bring research into the piece? What about the length of the samples? How smoothly are they integrated? How do they flow within the narration?

I think that you don't need to have a 2/3 sentence introduction for a 5-second clip. I think that if you're going to include a clip, you should have more information contained in it and it should be longer than 5ish seconds.

• How well does the essay make use of music, ambient noises, or sound effects? What might be done with additional sounds to improve the piece

I like the idea of using intro music or something to ease the audience in. There is no use of music, ambient noises, or sound effects. I would include music at the beginning and/or end to add a nice touch/to engage the audience. There are large chunks of narration, and I think it would be nice to break that up with audio from other speakers. 

• What can you say about the narration? Are there aspects of the tone that can be improved? Are there points that are not clear. What about the quality of the capturing of the voice?

I think that the quality of the voice is nice! I personally think that the pace of the narration is too slow but I understand that some people do prefer that slower pace. The points make sense and are thoroughly explained. There are just a couple of stumbles in the narration that could easily be rerecorded. 

• What technical aspects stand out? What might be done with the volume levels? What about transitions between materials? What other edits will improve the technical aspects of the piece?

I think that the volume level between the narration and clips is consistent. The transitions are smooth. I think that technically, this is an excellent draft. 

Overall I think that you don't need as much narration as you have. The lack of variety in voices makes it difficult for the audience to stay engaged the whole time. 

Ekta: We already reviewed this one in class so I'm just going to try and expand on those points.

• How well does the essay make use audio samples to bring research into the piece? What about the length of the samples? How smoothly are they integrated? How do they flow within the narration?

I think that the first narration clip is poorly integrated. It is rather jarring. But I like the audio clips that were added! They flow well within the narration. One of the audio clips is weirdly echo-y.

• How well does the essay make use of music, ambient noises, or sound effects? What might be done with additional sounds to improve the piece?

I like the continual piano music. I don't think the first sound effects need to last as long as they do. I don't think you need to add any additional sounds. 

• What can you say about the narration? Are there aspects of the tone that can be improved? Are there points that are not clear. What about the quality of the capturing of the voice?

I think that the tone and narration are engaging. Points are clear. The quality is overall good if occasionally inconsistent. 

• What technical aspects stand out? What might be done with the volume levels? What about transitions between materials? What other edits will improve the technical aspects of the piece?

The volume is fairly consistent across clips. There is some odd static sound that would be great to cut out in the transitions. 

Anthony Nguyen:

How well does the essay make use audio samples to bring research into the piece? What about the length of the samples? How smoothly are they integrated? How do they flow within the narration?

I did not hear any integration of external audio samples. I would suggest including one from J.K. Rowling about her experience of creating the world found in the Harry Potter books. You could even include an audio clip about the purpose, variety, or creativity of world building.

How well does the essay make use of music, ambient noises, or sound effects? What might be done with additional sounds to improve the piece?

I would recommend including introduction and closing music to help not start and end abruptly. To help the listener conceptualize world building, you can include mystical and fantasy sound effects throughout the audio essay.

What can you say about the narration? Are there aspects of the tone that can be improved? Are there points that are not clear. What about the quality of the capturing of the voice?

The narration follows a line of progression with a definition of world building at the beginning, concrete examples of world building, to concluding about world building. The narration was monotone and could a more upbeat tone.

What technical aspects stand out? What might be done with the volume levels? What about transitions between materials? What other edits will improve the technical aspects of the piece?

There were some pauses between the narration. The audio essay needs editing to reduce the pauses. I could hear background noise at times. The transitions were limited and maybe putting transitional music or sound effects would ease the transitions. 

Amanda Patton:

How well does the essay make use audio samples to bring research into the piece? What about the length of the samples? How smoothly are they integrated? How do they flow within the narration?

The audio samples are useful to provide research into your topic of ghosting. I know you elaborate on the first audio clip after it plays, but I was confused initially why you selected that audio clip in that part of your audio essay. The length of the samples is appropriate and flows well into your audio essay.

How well does the essay make use of music, ambient noises, or sound effects? What might be done with additional sounds to improve the piece?

I enjoyed hearing the sound of ghosts at the beginning of the audio essay. The other sound effects were useful to help the listener feel connected. I would suggest including sound at the end of the audio essay.

What can you say about the narration? Are there aspects of the tone that can be improved? Are there points that are not clear. What about the quality of the capturing of the voice?

The narration flowed well. I would suggest speaking louder. The tone of your narration made you seem engaged and interested on the topic.

What technical aspects stand out? What might be done with the volume levels? What about transitions between materials? What other edits will improve the technical aspects of the piece?

The incorporation of the audio clips and sounds enhanced the audio essay. I would increase the volume of your narration. At times, it sounded as though your voice was cracking. You can edit the pitch of your voice.

Maddy Meyerhoffer

The integration could be better it’s a very hard line between when you’re speaking and when the clip starts. Maybe try to use the fade out and in features on your own clip and the audio clips. The length of some of the audio samples are good, but some are too short. There are a lot of short clips that you could try just saying instead. There are good lead-ins to the clips, but maybe work on also using a sentence to wrap up what was said in the clips. Some of the information in the clips the narration repeats. Very upbeat music at the beginning was nice, keep it going in the background the whole time to keep the same vibe going. I don’t know if I’d change the music at the end, you can use the same music from the begging to keep the whole thing cohesive. I also think including maybe a text-sound in the beginning and then a send sound at the end could make the piece more cohesive as well. Or maybe include a vocal of someone saying something like “Hey Siri, send a smiley face” at the beginning over the music and then you can come in once the music fades out. Just a few ideas you can play around with! There wasn’t very much fluctuation in the narration voice, it sounded a little monotone.  But the voice was captured well and I could understand everything said. There was a good fade out of the song in the beginning, but I don’t think it needs to be faded out completely. I think the song, in the beginning, might be a little loud, but the narration voice was a good volume. The other audio samples also had good volumes.

Anthony Nguyen

I really like how you used examples of worlds that have been created that we can all relate to. I’m interested to see which youtube clips you use to add research into the piece. The audio-essay is already almost five minutes, so when adding in your other audio samples I’d pay attention to how long you’re letting them play out. There isn’t any music, I know you said that you will add the youtube clips in your final draft. I would also add some music as well when you do that. Having some intro and outro music will add an element to the essay that will make it more attention-grabbing. If you don’t want to do intro and outro music you can use the theme songs of harry potter and star wars which you reference in your research, which would make the whole audio essay more cohesive. The narration is clear but it is a little slow and a little monotone. I found it hard to pay attention, but that was just mainly because there was nothing used to break up the voice. Once you go in and add the youtube clips the audience should be able to follow along better. Around 3:34 and 4:07 there was a sound in the background, you might want to go back and rerecord these parts, are maybe try to edit them out.

Alexis Marstiller

I thought the audio samples brought relevant information to the essay that wasn’t repetitive but built onto the topic. The samples were relatively short and were integrated very smoothly. The audio samples did not take up a sizeable part of the essay, which I appreciated because the bulk of the essay was written and spoken by Alexis. I appreciated how Alexis introduced the speakers from the audio samples before adding in their content. 

The sound effects at the beginning of the essay was a good start and sounded very professional, like the audio to a video I might find on a news site. The audio levels of the entire essay flowed together well and the background music wasn’t distracting or obnoxious. I was very impressed with the audio and have no suggestions on how to improve this aspect of the essay. 

I thought Alexis’ tone was very good; she spoke clearly without pauses or mumbles. The narration had a clear track and was well executed in terms of how information was presented and how it connected with inserted audio snippets. My only suggestion is to have more excitement in the voice while reading and sound more conversational as opposed to sounding like a news reporter. I thought for the most part the tone of voice was effective and very good but this is the only thing I can think to improve. 

I thought the volume levels, transitions, and edits all around were fantastic. Alexis could potentially add in a third audio sample but I don’t think it is necessary. I really enjoyed this audio essay and thought it provided impressive information.

Maddy Meyerhoff

I thought the audio samples provided good information that built onto Maddy’s talking points. The first audio sample sounds a bit muffled and I felt that it cuts off and returns to Maddy’s narration too abruptly. I thought the other clips flowed and transitioned more smoothly with Maddy’s narration. The sample lengths were great because they are short enough to not drag on and keep the listeners attention, while long enough to present relevant details. 

I think the essay would benefit from some sort of low-volume background noise or music, but I know this could be difficult because most of the audio samples have their own background sounds. I think the introductory music could be reduced from the 10 second span it currently goes but it isn’t distractingly long. The essay would gain from sound effects intertwined into the presentation. 

The narration was great in my opinion. Maddy sounds enthusiastic and isn’t monotone in the slightest, which I really appreciated. The quality of voice in the audio essay is very clear and at a good volume. 

The only technical aspects I would adjust are the transitions between audio samples and speaking, notably for the first sample. The volume levels throughout the essay were consistent. All around an impressive audio essay.

The two I had selected to peer review have not submitted theirs so I picked two others!

Alex Baell:

How well does the essay make use audio samples to bring research into the piece? What about the length of the samples? How smoothly are they integrated? How do they flow within the narration?

I feel as if the audio clip volumes need to be formatted so that they're a bit more even and consistent. The length of the samples are a little long and some of it could have been merely stated. 
How well does the essay make use of music, ambient noises, or sound effects? What might be done with additional sounds to improve the piece?

There are a few sound effects that I find are nice but I would have liked to see more. Additionally, the music toward the end is very nice and soothing but maybe continuing it for longer at the end after you stopped talking would have sounded better.
What can you say about the narration? Are there aspects of the tone that can be improved? Are there points that are not clear. What about the quality of the capturing of the voice?

I feel as if the narration continues on for quite a bit and it makes it hard to hold interest, however, the topic is very intriguing and I feel as if changing the cadence in your voice more would be more useful. 
What technical aspects stand out? What might be done with the volume levels? What about transitions between materials? What other edits will improve the technical aspects of the piece?

I answer this a bit in the first question but to just repeat it I would make sure the audio files are more similar in volume.

Danielle Kruchten

How well does the essay make use audio samples to bring research into the piece? What about the length of the samples? How smoothly are they integrated? How do they flow within the narration?

I feel as if there could be a bit more of a pause before you integrate your clips rather than just jumping directly into them after a second. Otherwise, I think the clips you use are great.
How well does the essay make use of music, ambient noises, or sound effects? What might be done with additional sounds to improve the piece?

The phone notification sound effects were a bit loud and distracted me from listening to your voice. Otherwise, I did like the music that you used in the background because it complimented what you were saying. 
What can you say about the narration? Are there aspects of the tone that can be improved? Are there points that are not clear. What about the quality of the capturing of the voice?

I really like your narration and tone throughout this audio essay because I feel as if you stress what should be stressed. 
What technical aspects stand out? What might be done with the volume levels? What about transitions between materials? What other edits will improve the technical aspects of the piece?

Your volume levels are pretty consistent which is nice and I feel like there are pretty smooth transitions other than for the first clip integrated which just jumps straight into it almost too quick. 

Alex Weiss:

There was clearly a lot of research that went into the making of this audio essay and that is awesome. Some clips were recognizable, like one of the Green brothers and John Oliver. Some of the samples are rather short, I’d consider cutting a few of them if you could still present the information they provide. That would also give you some extra room to work with sound effects as well as research clips. The narration flows pretty well around the clips, I’d recommend potentially doing a brief intro of who is talking for the pieces - but that is stylistic I think. 

I liked the music choices you made. Consider having the same one as your intro and your outro, as it may round out the piece a bit more. Having some soft music throughout may also be a good option, but up to you. Some additional sound effects would be helpful to break up and reinforce the piece as well, something like typing going on when talking about parents searching for vaccine information online. 

The narration is good and I think the message is clear throughout. I’d recommend enlivening your voice a little bit to add some dimension and character. That way it sounds more conversational as opposed to being formal. Audio quality is good, though there does seem to be an acoustic thing happening where the voice isn’t totally distinct. It may be the distance you were from the microphone or perhaps the environment in which you recorded. 

Technically, I’d recommend adding some easier transitions and taking out a few less-necessary research clips. Having a fade out from the more abrupt clips may be a good solution to use. Also, some volume adjustments on the clips would also serve to soften the differences between voices. 

Overall, I think your piece was informative and well researched and I’d focus on getting it to sound more cohesive. 

Alex Beall:

The opening clip of the essay speaks for itself and I really liked that. I recognized the clip as a newspaper opening, which is hard to do with just a short clip. The research clips that were used were relevant, and they brought up new ideas while also hitting on some of the topics that were discussed in the narration as a way to reinforce them. The lengths of the samples were long, but that didn’t bother me personally. They were also well integrated in terms of narration and audio transition. 

Music choice is great, I would consider making it a soft background throughout the whole piece. Some ideas for additional sounds are the opening jingles/sounds for various news cited and social media apps going on all at one or overlapping. I think that would support your narrative about so much information being on our phones quite nicely. 

Such a crisp sound throughout and very clear diction throughout the narration. I was immediately impressed by the quality. I think your tone is spot on and steady throughout the whole piece. 

Technically, I’d work on eliminating the start and stop sounds from recording in pieces. A couple louder breath sounds could also be eliminated. Volume is good, maybe a slightly softer volume for the second research clip. I’d suggest fading out the ending of the last research clip in order to make the transition less abrupt. 

Honestly though, these are nit-picking things which for me means that you are on a great track. 

Overall, a really great job and your recording quality is fantastic and I think some edits to the recording queues would be beneficial. 

Weiss,Alex Alexander

How well does the essay make use audio samples to bring research into the piece? What about the length of the samples? How smoothly are they integrated? How do they flow within the narration?

The audio samples are very well thought out on your piece. Although, sometimes the clips are too short. Another thing I would say is try to keep your voice up, because when you talk and then the narration of another person comes up it seems like they are screaming. 

• How well does the essay make use of music, ambient noises, or sound effects? What might be done with additional sounds to improve the piece?

I really like the sound in the beginning. I think there could be a way you could figure out to put a sound in under your voice, so people can distinguish your voice and the clips you pull. 

• What can you say about the narration? Are there aspects of the tone that can be improved? Are there points that are not clear. What about the quality of the capturing of the voice?

I really love the points and how clear the message you are getting across is. I like your different stresses on different words based on importance, but i feel like you aren’t excited while speaking about it. 

• What technical aspects stand out? What might be done with the volume levels? What about transitions between materials? What other edits will improve the technical aspects of the piece?

I already talked about the volume levels and I think that will help transform you into a great grade. The transitions between materials are very good and I feel as though I could learn something from them. Great job!

Wayne,Reagan Marie

• How well does the essay make use audio samples to bring research into the piece? What about the length of the samples? How smoothly are they integrated? How do they flow within the narration?

I like how you incorporated your clips. It seemed like they were perfectly integrated and so smooth within the podcast. I like the other one where you announce who is talking because of her credibility

• How well does the essay make use of music, ambient noises, or sound effects? What might be done with additional sounds to improve the piece?

I love how you incorporated a commercial into your clip. The music makes it fun. My favorite part of the entire podcast is when you put in the clicking noises. 

• What can you say about the narration? Are there aspects of the tone that can be improved? Are there points that are not clear. What about the quality of the capturing of the voice?

I love the tone of your voice, it makes it very interesting and is very easy to become interested with what you are talking about. Your quality is almost better than the videos.

• What technical aspects stand out? What might be done with the volume levels? What about transitions between materials? What other edits will improve the technical aspects of the piece?

I think the volume levels are perfect- maybe the incorporated clips could possibly be changed to make it a little higher. I really don’t think that anything else should be changed. 

Weiss,Alex Alexander

How well does the essay make use audio samples to bring research into the piece? What about the length of the samples? How smoothly are they integrated? How do they flow within the narration?

The audio samples are very well thought out on your piece. Although, sometimes the clips are too short. Another thing I would say is try to keep your voice up, because when you talk and then the narration of another person comes up it seems like they are screaming. 

• How well does the essay make use of music, ambient noises, or sound effects? What might be done with additional sounds to improve the piece?

I really like the sound in the beginning. I think there could be a way you could figure out to put a sound in under your voice, so people can distinguish your voice and the clips you pull. 

• What can you say about the narration? Are there aspects of the tone that can be improved? Are there points that are not clear. What about the quality of the capturing of the voice?

I really love the points and how clear the message you are getting across is. I like your different stresses on different words based on importance, but i feel like you aren’t excited while speaking about it. 

• What technical aspects stand out? What might be done with the volume levels? What about transitions between materials? What other edits will improve the technical aspects of the piece?

I already talked about the volume levels and I think that will help transform you into a great grade. The transitions between materials are very good and I feel as though I could learn something from them. Great job!

Wayne,Reagan Marie

• How well does the essay make use audio samples to bring research into the piece? What about the length of the samples? How smoothly are they integrated? How do they flow within the narration?

I like how you incorporated your clips. It seemed like they were perfectly integrated and so smooth within the podcast. I like the other one where you announce who is talking because of her credibility

• How well does the essay make use of music, ambient noises, or sound effects? What might be done with additional sounds to improve the piece?

I love how you incorporated a commercial into your clip. The music makes it fun. My favorite part of the entire podcast is when you put in the clicking noises. 

• What can you say about the narration? Are there aspects of the tone that can be improved? Are there points that are not clear. What about the quality of the capturing of the voice?

I love the tone of your voice, it makes it very interesting and is very easy to become interested with what you are talking about. Your quality is almost better than the videos.

• What technical aspects stand out? What might be done with the volume levels? What about transitions between materials? What other edits will improve the technical aspects of the piece?

I think the volume levels are perfect- maybe the incorporated clips could possibly be changed to make it a little higher. I really don’t think that anything else should be changed. 

Shayaan

How well does the essay make use audio samples to bring research into the piece? What about the length of the samples? How smoothly are they integrated? How do they flow within the narration?

I liked the audio samples. They were integrated pretty well. I thought that stylistically, I would introduce the clips rather than play them and explain what the listener just heard. This doesn't include the intro, though. I thought the intro, if it was changed slightly (which I talk about later) would be very effective. 

How well does the essay make use of music, ambient noises, or sound effects? What might be done with additional sounds to improve the piece?

I think that the sound effects were a good transition. One thing I would say, though, is that the Turkish commentary in the beginning could be improved. I know that you want to connect it to a theme of it becoming global, but I feel like you could cut it up. If there was any way for you to do quick, two second clips of announcers in various languages shouting, it might be more impactful. For instance, rather than just including Turkish, also include Spanish, French, or wherever else basketball is popular. I would also either start or end in English to make it more understandable. Outro music could also be useful. 

What can you say about the narration? Are there aspects of the tone that can be improved? Are there points that are not clear. What about the quality of the capturing of the voice?

The narration was informative. As someone who isn't involved in the NBA twitter scene, it was easy to understand. I think that if you were able to speed up you narration, it would be more pleasing to hear. A lot of your soundbites were good, but the pauses between them didn't need to last as long. I thought the voice was captured well, and don't think it needs editing.

What technical aspects stand out? What might be done with the volume levels? What about transitions between materials? What other edits will improve the technical aspects of the piece?

I thought volume levels were good and did not need editing. I enjoyed the inserted clips. However, like I said previously, if there would be any way for you to easily speed up your narration slightly (maybe 1.15x speed), it would sound more conversational and easier to follow along. I don't think the essay overall needs any massive changes, I thought it was very good.

Alex

How well does the essay make use audio samples to bring research into the piece? What about the length of the samples? How smoothly are they integrated? How do they flow within the narration?

I really liked the audio samples, and thought that they all contributed to your point well. They flow easy and are smoothly integrated. I think that the length of them is good. I wouldn't change anything in this aspect.

How well does the essay make use of music, ambient noises, or sound effects? What might be done with additional sounds to improve the piece?

I thought the music and sound effects were a good way to transition into the essay and out of it. However, the one nitpick I have is to maybe make your outro music slightly longer, after you are done speaking. That way, the reader is more prepared for the end of the essay.

What can you say about the narration? Are there aspects of the tone that can be improved? Are there points that are not clear. What about the quality of the capturing of the voice?

I really liked your narration. It was conversational and well paced. The tone of your voice was good. No points were unclear, and the quality was good. I would have no changes here. 

What technical aspects stand out? What might be done with the volume levels? What about transitions between materials? What other edits will improve the technical aspects of the piece?

I thought the podcast sounded very professional. I think that the volume levels were even throughout the piece. Transitions were done well. If I had to nitpick, I would say you could potentially include more sound effects as transitions to each part of your essay, but it's not needed. I thought this audio essay was really good.

Alex Trippi:

• How well does the essay make use audio samples to bring research into the piece? What about the length of the samples? How smoothly are they integrated? How do they flow within the narration?
  • Samples are not integrated yet but I can see where they will be helpful. Make sure you are incorporating transitions from your own script into where they will be added.
• How well does the essay make use of music, ambient noises, or sound effects? What might be done with additional sounds to improve the piece?
  • No music yet. I can see it being useful as a fade in/ out but not so much in the background throughout.
• What can you say about the narration? Are there aspects of the tone that can be improved? Are there points that are not clear. What about the quality of the capturing of the voice?
  • The audio quality and volume is very good. Your tone in even and consistent and the pace is easy to follow. Just make sure that when you add video and audio it is consistent.
• What technical aspects stand out? What might be done with the volume levels? What about transitions between materials? What other edits will improve the technical aspects of the piece?
  • Without clips added it is hard to say. What you have now is very good.

Reagan Wayne:

• How well does the essay make use audio samples to bring research into the piece? What about the length of the samples? How smoothly are they integrated? How do they flow within the narration?
  • I liked the clicking a lot. It broke up the script well and kept my attention. The clips were good too; however, I would say to cut out the background music while you are playing the videos and fade it back in when you speak again.
• How well does the essay make use of music, ambient noises, or sound effects? What might be done with additional sounds to improve the piece?
  • I like the background audio. It is at a great volume and doesn't overtake your script. Maybe bring the volume of the clips up. There is a gap in quality between the clips and your voice and I think adding just a little volume could help a little.
• What can you say about the narration? Are there aspects of the tone that can be improved? Are there points that are not clear. What about the quality of the capturing of the voice?
  • Your voice is very clear and there is emotion behind what you're saying, which is great. The pace also makes it easy to follow.
• What technical aspects stand out? What might be done with the volume levels? What about transitions between materials? What other edits will improve the technical aspects of the piece?
  • Like I said, maybe pull the volume of the clips up a little bit and turn down the background volume of the music during clips to break it up a bit.

Jeff Holmes

I liked the topic a lot! You could expand on some points more since I wanted to know more about what you were saying. It was somewhat short, so more evidence would make it longer. Some background music would be nice, and it might help to get rid of the odd static sounds. The transition to the first clip could be stronger.

Danielle Kruchten

Your voice has a good tone too it, and I wasn't bored at all. It was easy to hear you and your clips. The beeps are a little too loud, and it distracted me from what you were saying. You have good transitions except for the beginning and end where your musics comes in. I think a different choice in music would be great.

Hope Conn:

How well does the essay make use audio samples to bring research into the piece? What about the length of the samples? How smoothly are they integrated? How do they flow within the narration?

• I felt that the audio clips went along with the clip smoothly. To make them flow with the narration even more, I would think about possibly introducing the speaker prior to them coming in. This would allow the listener to prepare for a different voice so they are not caught off-guard.

How well does the essay make use of music, ambient noises, or sound effects? What might be done with additional sounds to improve the piece?

• I felt that the background music was appropriate. It was light enough to where it didn’t take away from your narration. If I were to change anything, I would make the pause in the beginning a bit shorter. Other than that, the use of sound effects/music was great!

What can you say about the narration? Are there aspects of the tone that can be improved? Are there points that are not clear. What about the quality of the capturing of the voice?

• In my opinion, the narration itself was the best part about this piece. Your tone was appropriate and the way you emphasized certain words allowed for your points to come off as clear. The quality of the sound capture was also good. 

What technical aspects stand out? What might be done with the volume levels? What about transitions between materials? What other edits will improve the technical aspects of the piece?

• I might consider lowering the volume of the clips a little, but this did not take away from the narration at all. As previously stated, I would think about putting in introductions for the speakers in the clips just to make the transitions smoother. 

Dawn Culton:

How well does the essay make use audio samples to bring research into the piece? What about the length of the samples? How smoothly are they integrated? How do they flow within the narration?

• I liked how the intro music was quiet because it allowed for your voice to really capture my attention when it came in. I think the length of the samples was appropriate because the audio samples complimented your narration and not the other way around. To improve on the flow, I would think about adding some sort of introduction for the speakers. 

How well does the essay make use of music, ambient noises, or sound effects? What might be done with additional sounds to improve the piece?

• I think the use of sound effects was appropriate. You could add in some outro music, but I don’t think it’s necessary. 

What can you say about the narration? Are there aspects of the tone that can be improved? Are there points that are not clear. What about the quality of the capturing of the voice?

• Your narration was very clear and I feel like your tone was appropriate. The quality of the capturing of the voice was also good. Your emphasis on certain words allowed for your point to get across easily. 

What technical aspects stand out? What might be done with the volume levels? What about transitions between materials? What other edits will improve the technical aspects of the piece?

• I’ve already mentioned possibly introducing the speakers before cutting to audio samples in order to improve the transitions. Other than that, I think this is a great piece!