Still need to make more edits to make the audio clips more cohesive, as well as add into and outro music and fade the transitions.
Comments
The narration is concise and…
The narration is concise and clear. The background ambient sound can be cleaned up and the capturing of the voice standardized in any revisions. You can also fine tune the volume levels. I also feel like the structure might be reworked a bit to set up the core of the essay, which seems to be about taking notes on a laptop vs on paper. Perhaps rework the opening to be less about technology in class broadly, and more about note-taking. It might be a bit short, then, though, so maybe it can be broadened to be about assistive devices in the classroom. You might talk about tickers or downloaded slides or some other class assistance aspects. In any case, this is coming along well.
Audio Essay Review
1. Your voice recording quality is kinda wonky.
2. May actually have too many quotes for the length.
3. Script is very good but also very short. Is there any way to stretch this out?
4. Yeah, into outro, but you know that.
5. Quotes are low quality as well, kinda distracting.