Towards the end the background music does something weird, I don't know if it's super noticeable, but I'll probably have to go back and figure or what that was. When listening can you pay attention to the content, everything I said was pretty surface level and not much of it was very complex, but I want to know if I got my point across at least and gave people something to think about.
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I like the sound effects…
I like the sound effects that pull the listener in. I would delete the phrase "that states." I also like the transition before the key questions. The narration seems to be working well. There is a small sense of the narration being read from script, so you can aim for a bit more informality. I like the way the first clip is set up, but might say, Leslie Cowren shares her perspective. . . . The clip provides good insights. And the points in the narration are also working well. The second clip also provides good content and is woven into the piece well. The content is all strong, so focusing on capturing the narrative track with a good tone and conversational feel, and then working on polishing aspects like transitions and volume levels will make it even stronger. Nice work.
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1. The audio samples that you use are well-chosen and are integrated smoothly. There are no abrupt stops or pauses which is super helpful when listening as it keeps me engaged the whole time. None of your samples were too long and I thought they added great support for what you were saying in your piece.
2. I don't really notice the problem with your background music that you pointed out. I think that it works well with your piece. It's not too loud and it doesn't draw attention away from your voice. My only real suggestion for you sound effect wise, is that maybe you could include some dinging/notification sounds with the typing at the beginning. I just think that it would add to the effect that you are going for. I wouldn't add any length to it, because I think the typing sound stops at the perfect moment, but just overlaying some notification sound effects will add a nice touch.
3. While you don't go in-depth with figures or data, I think you get your point across nicely with your narration. I actually prefer that you don't go super in-depth with it. If you were to throw in a bunch of numbers and figures it would get boring and hard to focus on it. I think you scratch the surface just enough for a short audio essay. I also like the tone and volume of your voice in this piece. It's very soothing and calm as you listen to it which makes it pleasing to listen to.
4. One thing I would say to watch out for is to make sure that your voice doesn't get lost in the background music. Your voice is very soft and that might cause it to get lost in the music. So I would just make sure that the background music doesn't get too loud and to fade it a bit more at certain times. Or maybe raising the volume of your voice just a bit. I wouldn't raise it too much because then it might sound out of place. Overall, I really enjoyed listening to your piece and couldn't find a lot of issues with it.