Somewhere in the Middle

Submitted by ifsmith on Tue, 04/21/2020 - 05:19

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Submitted by iamdan on Tue, 04/21/2020 - 15:55

I really like the storytelling feel to the piece. And the visuals all are put together well. The layering and editing keep the viewer engaged. The narration is also engaging with a really nice tone. For the piano music that starts with the first Almjed quote (1:00), I might bump down the volume just a tad. The visual for the second quote (1:35) feels less successful than the first instance. At 2:20, you can think about reshooting or swapping out imagery of the tags to fit better with the vertical format--not a huge deal. The rest of the imagery is fine. At 3:42, there is a repeated segment of the narrative to cut out. For the points that start around 4:50, it might be worth a bit more conjecture about the ways Pinterest can see around your profile. Since you were likely on the same laptop, they somehow knew to over-ride the 88 year old and serve the product based on data that was not part of what you had given Pinterest. This angle might be made a bit more explicit. I might bump down the music a tad toward the end as well. And you could fade out the last bit of music a bit more. This is a very engaging video that is put together with some great strategies. A few fixes and tweaks will take it to the next level. Great work. 

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