Pinterest-ed in Who I Am

Submitted by cschnitz on Thu, 04/16/2020 - 13:21

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Submitted by iamdan on Tue, 04/21/2020 - 17:37

I like the way the choice of music for the piece. It creates a nice sense of imagery. I also feel like the segments after 2:04 when you take up the alter ego do well at driving toward conclusions about the algorithm and identity. For some segments--e.g., references to belly fat, quotes, decor--it might be that more resonance between materials on screen and the narration could be helpful. As the conclusions play out, I like the use of layers to emphasize the motherhood in the background of the results. I also like the way Pinterest is personified. The takeaway points provide good insights. For some of the earlier segments, I wonder if a bit more staggered approach to the layout and delivery of materials on screen might be worth experimenting. The good morning Carly, could show in one portion, followed by visual materials; then some text signaling the 33 year old Australian could follow, and then different visual materials. The energy and flow are nice; at the same time, I feel a bit disoriented with all of the rapid scrolling. Is there a way to add more orientation in spots for the viewer, even if more of the mixed, rapid blending eventually comes into play? This feels less of an issue after 1:00 when the narration kicks in to give more guidance. The way this brings home a clear point is working well. At some point, you can think about whether the final question could be reworked. I wonder if closing out with the point about motherhood expectations would make the piece more self-contained. Or perhaps expanding a bit more with some additional take-away points or conjectures would give the piece more breathing room to wrap up. You might split the music, and have it drop out in the middle, or reintroduce it without lyrics to get more or it on the timeline if you stretch things out. I enjoyed this. Nice work.

 

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