Wikipedia: An Unlikely Hero

Submitted by Mason Laney on Tue, 02/18/2020 - 05:58

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Submitted by iamdan on Fri, 03/20/2020 - 17:48

The narration is well written and has a nice tone. You might experiment with some light background music. The visuals also resonate well with the narration. There is a lot of information coming quickly, so perhaps slow down the narration in the final capture. It's fine if it stretches out a bit. You might also build in a couple of pauses and transitions to give folks a chance to digest. I like the way the piece expands to take up the concerns in the second half. You do a nice job of countering the usual complaints. To add visual variety in the second half, you might mix some different imagery into the scrolling pages with highlighted sections. Perhaps zoom in on an excerpt in a spot or two or think through other ways of breaking things up. At about 5:56, there is a visual artifact on screen. You might also log in and show some editing, etc. when discussing the open nature. This is working great with the narration and information, so working on the pacing and adding some more visual interest along the way will make it even stronger. Nice work.

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